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> From: Ivar Rønnestad <Ivar.Ronnestad@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>, Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> Subject: Comments and corrections from me
> Date: Mon, 8 Feb 2021 14:55:15 +0000
>
> Pls find enclosed.
>
> IvarR
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> From: Ivar Rønnestad <Ivar.Ronnestad@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>, Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> Subject: Comments and corrections from me
> Date: Mon, 8 Feb 2021 14:55:15 +0000
>
> Pls find enclosed.
>
> IvarR
Except serial comma before 'and', we use UK style.
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: RE: HAVBRUK revision r10452 (relevance r10454)
> Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2021 19:38:21 +0000
>
> Not it may seems as reduce and replace is the goal of the model
> I would either skip this sentence
>
> The model will replace and reduce the use of live fish in research.
>
> Or I would add an "also":
>
>
> The model will also replace and reduce the use of live fish in research.
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>From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
>To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
>Subject: RE: HAVBRUK revision r10452 (relevance r10454)
>Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2021 19:16:14 +0000
>
>But why do you want to say the same about the 3Rs twice in the short
>relevance text?
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: RE: [automatic] New HAVBRUK revision r10452
> Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2021 13:41:18 +0000
>
> I keep suggesting these changes.
> -j
We cannot delete "Aquaculture research" under the project title because it
will then not agree with the NFR template
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: RE: HAVBRUK revision r10444
> Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2021 10:39:41 +0000
>
> Can you also change this to the yellow text in the Relevance document?
>
> Fish welfare is a major component in sea lice infestations, which again is
> the main reason the government has introduced the traffic light system to
> regulate the industry (Myksvoll et al 2020), and for the very few new
> permits for increased salmon production since 2013.
>
> (There is not full stop, but close to.)
>
> Jarl
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> The relevance document also needs a line that the references are in the
> project description, or else the references should be at the end of the
> relevance text. (I do not know whether the reviewers will get to read the
> relevance document, or only the RCN aquaculture staff.)
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>, Sergey Budaev <sbudaev@gmx.com>
> CC: Ivar Rønnestad <Ivar.Ronnestad@uib.no>, Floriana Lai <Floriana.Lai@uib.no>
> Subject: RE: HAVBRUK revision r10444
> Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2021 10:20:56 +0000
>
> Good to see that the text is getting close!
> 1) Once we have decided on which reviewers we shall suggest, we should
> make sure they find themselves in the text. Maybe we should suggest Marion
> Dawkins? (I was also thinking of Donald Broom, but he is almost 80 years old.)
>
> 2) There is a mismatch between the explanation for "fish talk to me" in the
> footnote on Harald Sveier and Lerøy SG versus in the relevance document. I
> think we shall change the footnote (from referring to PFF to referring to
> coping) by using (almost) the same wording as in the relevance document.
FIXED, DONE
>
> 3) The relevance document does not tell the reader that it is about
> relevance. I suggest you change the title from "Aquaculture Research" to
> "Relevance for aquaculture". The relevance document also needs a line that
> the references are in the project description, or else the references should
> be at the end of the relevance text. (I do not know whether the reviewers
> will get to read the relevance document, or only the RCN aquaculture staff.)
There is a clear header text: - "Relevance of the project to the selected
topics under the call for proposals" with red tag "FPRV (do not remove)". So
it is clear. The "Aquaculture research" is the verbatim name of the research
topic, as stated in the template. I do not think we need to change it here.
>
> 4) (And the budget may need a revision to include TDI, will talk to Heidi
> on Monday.)
>
> Jarl
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> From: Ivar Rønnestad <Ivar.Ronnestad@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: Re: CVs
> Date: Fri, 5 Feb 2021 14:37:31 +0000
>
> 2017-21
>
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: LeuSENSE: 2017-2020
> Date: Fri, 5 Feb 2021 14:23:27 +0000
>
> https://www.uib.no/en/persons/Ana.Gomes#uib-tabs-current-projects
> 2017-2020
>
> (Research collaborator in the RCN project LeuSENSE (2017-2020) - Exploring
> leucine’s role in feed intake and growth under stress: from sensing to
> action (PI: Ivar Rønnestad, UiB; Grant no. 267626).)
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> 2)
> It would be good to have this red text (or a modification) at page 1,
> rather saying that these concepts will be explained at p 2-3. "Red text"
> deep into the document is not so effective.
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> From: Jarl Giske <Jarl.Giske@uib.no>
> To: Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>,
> Ivar Rønnestad <Ivar.Ronnestad@uib.no>,
> Sergei Budaev <Sergey.Budaev@uib.no>
> Subject: RE: HAVBRUK revision r10422
> Date: Fri, 5 Feb 2021 12:40:47 +0000
>
> Very good!
> Three things:
>
> 1)
> I suggest we change
>
> The major knowledge challenge is therefore to develop a predictive model
> that can be integrated into the precision aquaculture environment, to foresee
> troubles before they grow big.
>
> to
>
> The major knowledge challenge for fish wellbeing is therefore to develop a
> predictive model that can foresee troubles before they grow big.
>
> 2)
> It would be good to have this red text (or a modification) at page 1,
> rather saying that these concepts will be explained at p 2-3. "Red text"
> deep into the document is not so effective.
>
> 3)
> Fig 5: this indicates 4 full year. Either change text to a first (short)
> year or change label to say a year starts 1 Oct.
>
> It is still possible to sva space by another look at the figures. Move them
> to the right margin, and cut the tail of the fish. Fig 1 can be shrinked.
>
> Jarl
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